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Campfire
by Ken HarnischI might stir the embers in the campfire
If it will help me see your face
Once more before you sleep
The deep night’s purple-black will cloak
Your eyes, which I want to remember
In my sweetest dreams
Before the rising sun
Brings my love to light again.
When the orange dawn is risen
Upon the countenance I adore
I realize I will fret again, knowing
Silence is my suffering
Timidity my curse
But with you this near
This time
I may yet rise heroically
And be closer to the words
My lips have never found the will to form.
07/16/2001 Posted on 04/25/2007
Copyright © 2024 Ken Harnisch
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 04/25/07 at 04:04 AM I like that last line, man. This is a great, vivid piece, and that last line really closes it perfectly. |
| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 04/25/07 at 04:33 AM You have such a nice touch with this. There is a tentative nature to this, a feeling of possibilities - "might stir the embers in the campfire" - that segues nicely into the "silence is my suffering". It feels like you are on a threshhold and just need to take that first step, speak that first word. The last three lines are a fine ending. |
| Posted by Tony Whitaker on 04/25/07 at 07:55 AM Beautiful, beautiful and so vivid in the moment around the campfire slipping into the silent suffering to say what's on the mind of the camper. |
| Posted by Kate Demeree on 04/26/07 at 04:14 AM It is so good to see your poetry flowing once more! *soft smile* You have not lost your touch! This is both evocative and romantic... the longing through the whole poem makes the reader feel very wanting while reading... |
| Posted by Sarah Graves on 04/29/07 at 01:20 AM I really enjoyed reading this. You really make the reader care. This piece has a very eloquent, calm feel to it. I think a lot of people deal with timidity especially when they're interested in someone, part of the human condition I suppose. Great read :) |
| Posted by Anastasia Selby on 10/21/08 at 09:30 PM fantastic images!! I'm gla I stopped by to read this. |
| Posted by Kris Mara on 04/23/09 at 12:25 PM this has a wonderful flow -- your words, again, draw the reader in, intimate and direct with relatable and beautiful imagery....and again, it all leads into that perfect ending. |
| Posted by Doreen Cavazza on 05/11/11 at 12:41 PM It's breathy and melancholy. I like the voice of this. Nice job. |
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