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breathe, it serves the world
by Jared Fladelandwhere does the breath go?
each day, i send a thousand children off to fight
the battle between molecules:
dust particles, vapors, chemicals, and, oh yes,
that whole air known as oxygen.
i regret the exhalation in every moment
because I want to hold the world in.
i am selfish enough to dream my lungs
can keep every face in small cupboards
made of pink organic tissue.
the epitome of holding on for far too long.
02/25/2007 Posted on 02/25/2007
Copyright © 2024 Jared Fladeland
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Katerina T Nix on 03/01/07 at 11:07 PM I really liked this one, Jared. I like the idea you put forward regarding the necessity of breath vs human selfishness. Great work :) Kat. |
| Posted by V. Blake on 01/25/10 at 05:18 AM Let me be the first to congratulate you on a wonderfully creative POTD. |
| Posted by Therese Elaine on 01/25/10 at 06:04 AM Jared, I remember your work well but somehow I missed this one...and I am glad it got POTD so I could re-familiarize myself!!! I absolutely love the imagery you create here -it is lush and tangible and visceral and humid -brilliant piece of craftsmanship and deserving of POTD!!! |
| Posted by Michael Smith on 01/25/10 at 06:07 AM An excellent POTD selection. Congrats! |
| Posted by George Hoerner on 01/25/10 at 02:14 PM I too missed this along the way and I fear far more things I shouldn't have. Congratulations on POTD. A very fine write. |
| Posted by Laurie Blum on 01/25/10 at 02:28 PM This is a great poem...so touching and deep. Congratualtions on POTD Jared |
| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 01/25/10 at 04:06 PM I'm sitting here examining my breathing, reading this fine POTD!
"i am selfish enough to dream my lungs
can keep every face in small cupboards
made of pink organic tissue" - loved these lines especially. |
| Posted by Joe Cramer on 01/25/10 at 10:48 PM ... well done..... congrats on POTD!!! |
| Posted by Leslie Ann Eisenberg on 01/30/10 at 06:05 AM a fine specimen from you, young man! congrats on POTD! pk |
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