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Would You Have Told Me You Loved Me?
by Genevieve Sturrockwhat would you have said
if i had just told you the truth
that day in your car
that i was scared
and had no place else to go
everything i owned was packed
into one big box
ready to ship out
my time was up
i had no job
no money
no car
no home
except back home
a thousand miles away from you
what would you have said
if i had just told you the truth
that i met him while nursing
the broken heart you gave me
and he made me feel
stupid and
inadequate
and i was scared that
maybe he was right
and that you weren't there
when i missed you
but he was
and so i pretended he was you
even when he made me feel worthless
what would you have said
if i had just told you the truth
that i loved you
and you hurt me
and i didn't want to leave
oh, God, i didn't want to leave!
but i had no place else to go
because to stay would have meant
hoping that maybe you did love me
and that hope
is what broke me in the first place
but you never said you loved me
strip this last remnant of delusion away
as i teeter on the brink
one whisper light push
will topple me
what would you have said
if i had just told you the truth
02/24/2007 Posted on 02/25/2007
Copyright © 2024 Genevieve Sturrock
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Jennifer Ragan on 02/25/07 at 03:08 PM This reads like a diary...you express yourself well in this piece...great job:) |
| Posted by Amy Wustrin on 02/25/07 at 09:02 PM I can relate to every word in this, and i loved the way you told it. |
| Posted by Christel Crews on 02/27/07 at 04:06 AM yeah, the truth can really change things, can't they? and i think that's why its so hard to be honest because we know how much it can alter our lives.. this is wonderful and passionate |
| Posted by Rhiannon Jones on 03/01/07 at 06:11 PM Having said too much, having said too little, never knowing what if. You've told a familiar story so frankly, and so well. |
| Posted by Soulo Jacob Bourgeau on 03/01/07 at 10:14 PM I love pieces such as this, the cathartic process of splaying one's broken heart on the page. It's honest, yearning, yet unremorseful. I didn't like the 'teeter on the brink' line, however. Not a cliche snob, but it could finish stronger without that. |
| Posted by Joan Serratelli on 03/15/09 at 03:15 PM I could feel your pain and sadness. A very honest write, straight from your heart! |
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