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Making Myself Worthless In The Eye of Intimidation
by Jeffrey ParrenI am intimidated by how together you seem
Now obviously I don't know you so well
But to know you like me is bliss.
The potential is there -
For me to screw it up
To look like an idiot
Bad gut feeling.
* Again *
Bad habits magnify
Changing myself slightly
Sucking in the stomach too big
You like me for the person you know
So why do I try to look better and impressive?
Maybe because the last thing I want to do is ruin this
Ridding myself again of true love, happiness, and conversation. 02/10/2007 Posted on 02/10/2007
Copyright © 2025 Jeffrey Parren
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 02/10/07 at 07:34 PM Terrific shape to this poem, especially as I read about your "bad gut feeling" followed by the "Sucking in the stomach too big" which is such a great line, and makes me see you in the form of this poem sucked in at the middle. You have expressed so well that trepidation at losing something wonderful. I was also interested in the last word of the poem -"conversation" - which somehow puts your thoughts about this person above the purely physical attraction, and I like that. |
| Posted by Kathleen Wilson on 02/10/07 at 07:48 PM Excellent use of form to express content, and fine poem. I agree the "conversation" expands and emphasizes the content of relationship and what is valued there--the last line gives extension into the past and future of what is desired and cherished. Yes. |
| Posted by Genevieve Sturrock on 02/11/07 at 01:09 AM i have to agree, the form is great. i like the way the lines not only balance visually, but literarily (is that a word?)...To look like an idiot
Bad gut feeling.
* Again *
Bad habits magnify
Changing myself slightly...just great. |
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