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Gloaming

by Soulo Jacob Bourgeau

sanguine dusk moon wanes
indigo indelible;
saunters into noir

01/05/2007

Author's Note: 2nd line is a tongue twister, but I can't part with it.

Posted on 01/06/2007
Copyright © 2024 Soulo Jacob Bourgeau

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Gregory O'Neill on 01/06/07 at 05:07 AM

Great Soulo! I've missed your Ku's. This one's an excellent write!

Posted by Leslie Ann Eisenberg on 01/06/07 at 08:47 AM

mmmm, spin me in the moonlight....the second line is great, no worries! the flow is actually quite good. you shine brightly here. your words have been missed, my luminescent friend,. xopk

Posted by Shirin Swift on 01/06/07 at 12:52 PM

Deliciously rich from all angles...I esp love the second line.

Posted by Cristy M. on 01/06/07 at 05:17 PM

"saunters into noir." quite the catch, that line.

Posted by Kathleen Wilson on 01/07/07 at 07:53 AM

Amazing coloring in this, as if deep rich watercolors... spilling out... "indigo indelible"... mmm maybe a deep blue ink---and the changing scene to noir---hints black and mysterious dark, after the gloaming, and after the red moon wanes.... a beautiful colorful haiku-word painting... and yet very centered in the mysterious night. The "sauntered" somehow reminds me of "noir" film in its pace and gesture too, with the moon as main character.

Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 01/07/07 at 05:43 PM

The word that makes this for me is "saunters" - it gives this the subtle motion that separates this piece from other ordinary moonlit night descriptions. Your colors here are vivid.

Posted by Laurie Blum on 01/09/07 at 01:12 AM

I really like this, you know I adore short forms and you said so much with so few words.

Posted by Leonard M Hawkes on 01/09/07 at 04:13 AM

I see it and feel it--well done!

Posted by Leslie Ann Eisenberg on 01/09/07 at 07:24 AM

congrats on hitting number one on the front page. we're all so glad you see you back here!!!! ooo's pk

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