Hi Peter. Ethereal and moving. I love the image of a "soaring" moon...such wonderful motion. Excellent write. Thanks. (I dare anyone to come up with a briefer title, you've got that)

Fascinating and powerful mix of inventive form and content. The "I" that links (literally) like a hook from one stanza to the other, and the peaked verse waves all very effective, and even with the rather strict wordage that must be used to create this effect, or maybe partly as a result of that-- the waves of feeling come through, and strongly. The moon is not usually imagined as racing, and that's a fine image. The moon, water, sun--and the standing of the "I" in every case-- beneath and beside the influences of the --forces of nature-- force a smile, a wave, "against the tide" (wonderful image there)-- and we "sheild his eyes" (your)child--whose glow-wave and in the end "gun" and "cry" could be the very impetus for this emotional stand-- neneath in the end "the searing sun". A rich and creatively formed poem.

A unique, fascinating shape that makes me feel all begins with the "I" - divine or not. From there these three thoughts become ebb and flow. This cries for more, in my mind. Perhaps it is just me, needing a more gentle ending. There is a "walking away from" in the second stanza that brings such a sense of separation. The gun becomes a sad solution. I like this poem a lot.