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you're my favorite part of you
by Vere MantratriadI find myself
quaking
unable to
move from
the spot where
I first saw
what I knew
would be my
last stand
and the finality
of it all
rushed in
my crumbled
levee mentality
that forces my
mouth gaping
with a knowledge
undeniably chosen
but flowing in
from unknown
origins and I
can't help but
to notice where
you've strayed
to focus on my
words though they
betray me from
time to time
I'll cut off my
tongue should they
keep me from
finding myself
closer to you 08/01/2006 Posted on 08/02/2006
Copyright © 2024 Vere Mantratriad
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Maria Terezia Ferencz on 08/02/06 at 05:05 AM I know this feeling, and that is exactly how quick runtime fly it goes, just like the form you chose. Uncomfortable isn't it? Lovely at the same time. Strange. Nice writing I enjoyed this. |
| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 08/02/06 at 01:39 PM Just so good, every word fits into the next! |
| Posted by Jean Mollett on 08/03/06 at 03:52 AM Hi Vere,
God one. Sounds like the sweet rush of loving coming thru. Makes your heart flutter and go pitty pat when he walks by. :) |
| Posted by Michael Smith on 01/17/10 at 01:03 AM Saw this because it was, rightfully so, on someone's favorites-list. I've always loved this Vere Mantratriad style. I remember this from the first time I commented on it. It sings as I read it and leaves me breathless. Super job.
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