the reality of a released balloon by Christel CrewsLet me go
Cut the tie
Maybe IÂ’ll land
By your side
And if IÂ’m caught
By the breeze
It was not by choice
Breaking you from me
Let me go
To float away
To not return
To you someday
So close the door
Turn off the light
For I have flown
Into the night
06/14/2006
Author's Note: so, I’m not very big on rhyming, so if its cheesy, it is not the piece's fault, it is the author's
Posted on 06/19/2006 Copyright © 2024 Christel Crews
Member Comments on this Poem |
Posted by Rebecca Lin on 06/19/06 at 03:30 AM It's not cheesy...I really like it! :) |
Posted by Vere Mantratriad on 06/19/06 at 03:58 AM Love the title...really, it works very well. :) I know how you feel with rhyming...I always feel very weird when I rhyme... but I think you executed it very well here, it didn't feel cheesy to me at all. Rather, it flowed very well throughout. Nicely done! :) |
Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 06/20/06 at 04:59 PM Nice update to the ol' concept of giving a lover their freedom, and if they really love you they'll come back. I enjoyed the baloon analogy also. Quite clever! |
Posted by Jean Mollett on 06/21/06 at 03:25 AM Hi Christel,
It's very good, flows smoothly, rhymes very well. It's not cheesy. I know mine doesn't rhyme all the time. Ya write from your heart too. |
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