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(un)like romeo and juliet
by Christel Crews
Star-crossed,
paths destined,
a higher source working
Infatuation,
immaturity,
fatality in the making
Poisoned,
leaving her,
no dagger for the taking
05/22/2006 Author's Note: so, i found a t-shirt i had not worn in a long time and it has "star-crossed lovers" written across the front.. and as i walked to class today, this came to me.. i was thinking along the lines of snap-shots... if that makes sense
Posted on 05/23/2006
Copyright © 2024 Christel Crews
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Delilah Coyne on 05/23/06 at 01:09 PM Well, Romeo and Juliet is one of my favorites and I think each word in this piece is so perfectly placed. You've really captured the essence of their relationship in so short a poem. I enjoyed this very much. |
| Posted by Elizabeth Jill on 05/23/06 at 11:26 PM "Infatuation,
immaturity,
fatality in the making"
Ooooh, Christel! —this is divine comedy and tragedy in six brilliantly place words!!! |
| Posted by Michelle Angelini on 05/24/06 at 06:45 PM Christel, a very clear snapshot it is. Relevant not only to lovers of the past, but the present. Maybe you should find more teeshirts. ;-) Sometimes our best inspiration comes when we least expect the muse to visit us.
~Chelle~ |
| Posted by Julie Adams on 05/25/06 at 02:09 PM this is a great piece...I like the 2 breaks, keeping the imagery fresh but focused, intermitently revealed in pulses or snapshots...I like how the stanzas harmonize as flashes that together build into the climax of the Shakespearian tale...nice read, peace, *jewels* |
| Posted by Vere Mantratriad on 05/26/06 at 12:28 AM This is awesome... I can definitely understand this being snapshots. Isn't it wonderful, the things that crawl through our brains sometimes? |
| Posted by Kristi Paik on 06/25/06 at 05:41 AM Wow....def. a favorite. |
| Posted by Bethany Lee on 10/10/07 at 04:45 PM I think this is great, love the shirt! |
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