I think this is GREAT! I love the succint commentary, probing ideas that make you ponder, not unlike a haiku in that context...the sequence is poignant and effective, the last line punches...thanks for sharing this, peace always, *jewels*
I think this would make a great opening poem to a short story or maybe one of those Danielle Steel romance novels...maybe someday a Maureen Glaude romance novel???