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Pith & Blather
by Soulo Jacob BourgeauWalkin' the thin line
'Twixt pith and airy blather
'Tis best to side
With the former
Not the latter 12/28/2005
Author's Note: I pared a few words out of this. Now that I posted it, does it trip off the tongue, or do I need a couple more syllables in the last 2-3 lines? Sure, it's pithy -- but at what cost, man! What cost...? Hmmm.
Posted on 12/28/2005
Copyright © 2024 Soulo Jacob Bourgeau
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| Posted by Gregory O'Neill on 12/28/05 at 07:28 PM Good question Soulo, what cost, indeed. A choice we must make in everything we say. Good thought, and I like the form. |
| Posted by Jim Benz on 12/28/05 at 10:10 PM very pithy and not the least bit blathery. I'd keep it exactly as is. |
| Posted by Kyle Anne Kish on 12/29/05 at 05:22 AM Soulo, I read it out loud several times. Guess what? It worked every time. Your pithy works and it says something too. Post the darn thing! :) |
| Posted by Leslie Ann Eisenberg on 03/28/06 at 10:18 PM yes, definitely the former! feel like i've just taken a bath in a mug of condensed milk! clever and tight. PK |
| Posted by Alisa Js on 02/25/07 at 08:20 AM lol.. this one is too funny.. aloha |
| Posted by Meghan Helmich on 07/11/08 at 12:21 PM i think it's definitely good as is. too many syllables makes my tongue tired! |
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