This one does get the message across in a most direct way... but.. what do you think about? changing the first word in the last line to .'Ours'.. Ours in symphony.... isn't that the ultimate? at least it would be for me and this erotic haiku you have penned...just a thought from a romantic soul out here this side of paradise.. aloha..;-)

p.s. and if you change 'out' to 'our'.. wouldn't it ring more true with symphony? as symphony is more than one...

Ah, the economy of romance in this is delightful. The first movement of the symphony in gee major! I like it.