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shrew you
by Michele SchottelkorbIf you could see my face
Picture this, a dark sad place
Muddled with bleak adore
Thrashing on an endless floor
One small click and Im dead
Floating through your empty head
Ire here, fury there
Pulling out my feeble hair
So weary of this ancient quest
Sup my blood; take your best
For I love you, this is true
Beat me down; tame this shrew
06/16/2005 Posted on 06/16/2005
Copyright © 2024 Michele Schottelkorb
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Rula Shin on 06/16/05 at 03:04 PM Intense Michele, very much so. The title seems to be a bit of play on words to me, I feel it is subtly defiant as the end of the poem too contains sarcasm within the sadness and frustration that is so evident, "For I love you, this is true Beat me down; tame this shrew" - it's sad how easily we can take one another for granted, take advantage. This is an excellent and well-worded superbly rhyming way to express that sadness and frustration. Very well done Michele!
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| Posted by Ashok Sharda on 06/16/05 at 04:42 PM Shrew? hahaha Mymy, Am I so insensitive to derive a laughter from this projected image of yours? But I do, despite the frustration which found expression in this poem. Despite this vent of anger which does deflect in the form of a sarcasm and does succeed in generating some humor. Your title does. And the visuals, they are humorous. |
| Posted by Graeme Fielden on 06/17/05 at 01:43 AM A lyrically well-written, somewhat angst ridden vent here Michele. I hope you're feeling better for getting this out on paper :) |
| Posted by Amy Wustrin on 06/17/05 at 12:39 PM Shrew is one of my favorite words, and this is one of my favorite poems! |
| Posted by Max Bouillet on 06/18/05 at 02:42 AM Shrewd ;) verse that takes me right back to Shakespeare. Tis an ejoyable verse to read. |
| Posted by Susan Q Tomas on 06/18/05 at 03:46 AM Rula is right, this is intense. And I envy your rhyming without losing the intensity. The rhythm & rhyme make this profound. |
| Posted by Christina Bruno on 06/18/05 at 03:08 PM michele, amazing images and the scheme flows perfectly. i adore this piece |
| Posted by Karl Waldbauer on 06/24/05 at 02:34 AM The clever title lured me in and OMG! If I was teaching a poetry class I would read this to the class. If I were teaching a grad psych class, I'd read this poem. You are incredible, Michele. |
| Posted by Sarah Graves on 01/06/07 at 10:07 PM Congrats on POTD :) |
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