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Scarborough (haiku)
by Paganini Jones
night-time beach.
paddling in mist the castle
wears a crescent moon
06/10/2005 Author's Note:
A 'ku written as an example for an essay on writing haiku. (See my 'on poetry' folder for essays)For a picture of Scarborough Castle (not one of mine) GO HERE
Posted on 06/10/2005
Copyright © 2024 Paganini Jones
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| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 06/10/05 at 11:55 AM Although the word paddling throws me off, as it sounds like the castle is doing the paddling, I'm open minded enough to assume the person writing the haiku is in fact the one doing the paddling. Fine work. That image of crescent moon above the castle will be stuck in my mind for quite some time. :o) |
| Posted by Maureen Glaude on 06/10/05 at 02:05 PM whichever is paddling (I think you mean the moon)
this is exquisite. I wonder if
night-time beach paddle would work too, for a first line? Then it won't matter who's the subject? |
| Posted by Maureen Glaude on 06/10/05 at 02:05 PM whichever is paddling (I think you mean the moon)
this is exquisite. I wonder if
night-time beach paddle would work too, for a first line? Then it won't matter who's the subject? |
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