| Posted by Paul Marino on 06/09/05 at 06:53 PM ok, braddly, i'm cranky, and i kno you sort of wrote this bc it was inspired during one of our conversations, but my displeasure in this poem comes in the rhythm. you kno i love you though, right? anyway, i'm not sure if it's my crankiness or if it's the flow, but i don't like how the first stanza ends. let me just say, i've read it like 10 times, so almost like the poem at this point. ha, i didn't the first time i read it. i don't like the word dripping here either. there's not enough to this, for me. |
