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Amelia: Under the shade of midnight.
by Andrew S Adamseach of our moves is intently scrutinized
as we walk through these woods-
so we tread lightly- and only when
under the shade of midnight.
(suspicions aroused are
as passions aroused:
intense and everlasting
never to escape the eye of the beholder)
but these footfalls are
too joyus to leave lightly;
in our wake the
footprints will reflect
every sweet remembrance-
so we stray from the path,
making the adventure
all the more
enjoyable
mysterious
forbidden-
but, in doing so sacrifice the
distinguishable marks of our
presence
(and thus the
memory.)
but when the sun rises
the canopy will be so
thick
that the sunlight
will betray the forest floor-
and no longer
will we have to tread so lightly. 05/31/2005 Author's Note: comments/crits?
Posted on 06/01/2005
Copyright © 2024 Andrew S Adams
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Kimberly Bare on 06/01/05 at 03:19 PM i really like this piece...it has a good flow to it and a quiet sensuality...my only suggestion is for the line "(suspicions aroused are
as passions aroused:
intense and everlasting
never to escape the eye of the beholder)" i feel that the repetition of "aroused" threw me off a bit from the flow, perhaps consider condensing that first part a bit...ex.~"(suspicions arouse as do passions:
intense and everlasting
never to escape the eye of the beholder)"
Just my humble suggestion...overall a wonderful poem!
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