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Castaway
by Jeffrey ParrenMental castaway
Pursuer of flesh
Mocker of existence
Finding your next fix
Is her heart worth it?
While she falls in love
With you, blindly
You are abusing her.
She loves the ecstasy
You love the feeling
Where is the passion?
Taking advantage
Of her attraction
Not appreciating her
Mind her heart
You are lost. 05/21/2005 Author's Note: Many thanks and many props to Alaina Schneider for the word!
Revised 5/21/05....thanks Kyle Ann
Posted on 05/21/2005
Copyright © 2025 Jeffrey Parren
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Kyle Anne Kish on 05/22/05 at 02:32 AM "Mental castaway" ... oh I like this from the very start. I think it might read smoother if you broke it up into three separate stanzas. Just my thoughts. "While she falls in love
With you, blindly
You are abusing her.
She loves the ecstasy
You love the feeling
Where is the passion?" ... such vividness with your words is unseemingly distressing, as this poem should be. Good work. ~~ Kyle Anne
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