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A Beautiful Being

by Nikki Benson

It started with your mind

 

Amazing

 

I was bewildered that someone

Who appeared careless and inept

Could master thought to the point of blowing my mind

 

Then I noticed your mouth

 

Not bad

 

But when you smiled

You took my breath so far away

I didn’t remember the feeling

 

Then I noticed your face

 

Now that’s nice

 

Perhaps it warmed up

When you noticed me succumb

To my nerves and reveal myself

 

Then I noticed your body

 

WOW

 

It could have been my own

Disregard of who you were

That didn’t allow me to notice before

 

Then I noticed your soul

 

What a man

 

I’m happy to make your acquaintance

My name is Nikki

Nice to meet you

05/13/2005

Author's Note: This poem is to show that real beauty starts from the inside.

Posted on 05/13/2005
Copyright © 2021 Nikki Benson

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Jeffrey Parren on 05/13/05 at 09:44 PM

i really enjoyed this, the form emphasizes the words that need to be, while still concentrating at the task at hand...like the inner conversation of a mind enticed by a beautiful inner being and then realizing there is more too! like an added bonus. life should be filled with tons of added bonuses. ~JPP

Posted by Michelle Angelini on 07/09/05 at 11:42 PM

Nikki, your circular poem takes notice of someone in the space of one breath. From the mind to the face and body, then back to the soul; from critical judgement to acceptance, you reveal yourself to the other person just as your inner thoughts reveal him to you. One suggestion, most of the poem is like you're speaking to him. The little interjections are in your mind, so you can put them in italics. The html for that is insightful, which is what your poem is.
~Chelle~

Posted by Michelle Angelini on 07/09/05 at 11:44 PM

Actually, the html disappeared when I posted the comment, so again - (less than sign, "i", more than sign. Then at the end, same signs with a forward slash in front of the "i"

Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 12/04/14 at 04:52 PM

yes, ultimately that is true. anything worth the while is all waiting inside.

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