three-moon-sky (lament : threat | promise)

by Richard Paez

(lament : threat | promise)

{dedicated to the unreachable}

            | this is my burning question:
            | like a butterfly
            | with the weight
            | of a Venus,
            | know
            | my fingerprints
            | pull off dust -
            | your wings -
            | but I must
            | reach out
            | - fulfill
            | this need -
            | because
            | I am drawn
            | to
            | wings
            | as you
            | are drawn
            | to the gleaming


Posted on 09/16/2004
Copyright © 2020 Richard Paez

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Amanda L Marron on 09/16/04 at 11:10 PM

gorgeous imagery and wonderful to this!! absolutely magnificent!!!!

Posted by Amanda L Marron on 09/16/04 at 11:10 PM

wonderful "FEEL" to this!! i wish we could edit our comments...

Posted by Rula Shin on 09/17/04 at 04:54 PM

Both 'threat' and 'promise' a sad light shining on the destructive tendency of human nature. That's what I understood from this. Truly a lament, a heavy hearted confession even. Very well done Richard, left side, right side, both together...very well written.

Posted by Rula Shin on 09/17/04 at 04:56 PM

One question though...who are the 'unreachable'? I tend to think of them as the common 'mob'...I am interested in your intention...

Posted by Rula Shin on 09/17/04 at 05:59 PM

Hmmm...I am thinking this might even be about 'discovery' and the curiousity of man...the urgent need to toy with and try to understand anything and everything...hmmm....many layers to this...

Posted by Traci Mabats on 09/17/04 at 09:45 PM

quite compelling Richard

Posted by Tom Goss on 09/21/04 at 01:58 PM

Explosively terse, and would make an interesting song - with the left side being the chorus.

Posted by Rachelle Howe on 10/05/04 at 04:08 PM

how have i not seen this before? and how are you not the most famous poet ever?

Posted by Melissa Arel on 01/21/05 at 10:34 PM

Unique, original and utterly yours. Impressive in every way!

Posted by Maria Terezia Ferencz on 03/18/10 at 09:49 PM

Oh I love this! I just want to surround it with the photos of butterflies and hang it on a wall....

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