Posted by Agnes Eva on 08/08/04 at 01:59 PM You're on the right track here to a good haiku, showing how abundantly verdant summer is, and how many memories of summer are associated with green grass. I would just omit the words that seem like they were put in only for a 5-7-5 tally. haiku do not need to come in that syllable structure, as I have many times illustrated in the Tadpole forums. You've captured a good feeling of summer though. |