| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Michelle Angelini on 06/23/04 at 07:10 AM I never saw the other one, but I like the flow and imagery of this one. Yes, the unspoken meaning is clear, but could have several interpretations. Not having read the first one, I can only guess. Good work! |
| Posted by Heide McAlister-Bates on 06/23/04 at 07:58 AM A very poignant piece. |
| Posted by Maureen Glaude on 06/23/04 at 12:21 PM Oh, I love this. Perfect, and you know how I love swings. |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 06/23/04 at 04:29 PM Yes, much more impact than the previous version I find as it brings in a human element. Well done! |
| Posted by Anne Engelen on 06/24/04 at 07:17 PM i like this one too, but the first one touched me on a deeper personal level. |
| Posted by Charles E Minshall on 06/29/04 at 05:34 AM This brings a picture to mind. Well done...Charlie |
| Posted by Kara Hayostek on 07/31/04 at 04:56 AM I had to search through your stuff to find the other one, and yes I like this one much better. You get a sence of sadness/emptiness without the other word. |
