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Sing

by Paganini Jones

Sing then
When the water runs
And the tide sucks sand from under your feet

Sing
As the rhythm of rain
Beats down from the skies

Sing then
When the darkness creeps
And the unseen hand wipes the day away

Sing
As the silent night
Sleeps soft as a child

Sing then
When the silence cloaks,
And the watcher is sure he is quite alone

Sing
As the forgotten thoughts
Resurface in the long hours of the night

Sing then
When the song is gone
And the hollow throat has no more breath

Sing
as organ-pipes dream
in derelict churches and concert halls

Sing then
For everyone sings
In the golden dawn and the joy of the day

Sing
In the secret place
When unheard echoes roll to the skies

Sing then





06/01/2004

Author's Note: This is not quite right and needs surgery, possibly quite major. Though some may feel it should simply be put out of its misery. To me the problems are with the last 4 3-line strophes. Should it end after the first of them? Or is that too sudden? Help!

Posted on 06/01/2004
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Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Maureen Glaude on 06/02/04 at 03:26 PM

I really like the message to this and when I read it over, suspected you could really play with the order a bit, of stanzas, to create a crescendo or awakening effect. LIke taking the darker emotional parts and moving up below your first stanza, then there's the sense of lightening with the ones with positive feeling. I hope I'm clear. Anyway, lovely and heartening. I know what you mean, it is the hope that I receive from music at church and other places but especially church.

Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 06/02/04 at 04:27 PM

I like this a lot for its expression of day giving way to night and then back to day. This stanza especially stands out: Sing then When the darkness creeps And the unseen hand wipes the day away. That having been said, if this needs surgery, then it should be to strengthen that cyclical concept, including dropping or changing that last stanza. Good luck Pag! :o)

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