Posted by Meghan Helmich on 07/07/08 at 05:40 PM this is just vicious (which is a good thing!) i think the ending might be a bit too telling, because the poem is SO strong, and it says SO much without needing a summary ending. you might consider ending it a bit sooner. and i say that because by the time i get to "all you want is to die," i know EXACTLY what's going on. the only way you could wish such specific horrible things on someone is if you'd been through it yourself. and might i just add that i'm living this right now. and i understand 100%. awesome poem, amy. |