| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Michele Schottelkorb on 05/09/04 at 05:13 AM this is incredibly clever... you can find the old phrases written anew... excellent poem... blessings... |
| Posted by Jean Mollett on 05/09/04 at 05:14 AM Hi David,
old fashioned words in newfangled ways,
Hey very good. Quite clever. Not bad at all. I like it. And those words are just the startin of it. |
| Posted by Charles E Minshall on 05/09/04 at 05:19 AM Good experiment Dave.....Charlie |
| Posted by Ashok Sharda on 05/09/04 at 05:32 AM Yes, words? they mean what we mean them to mean as writers. Readers mean them based on their word experience and associations. This word play rather word usage of yours is meaningful. Its meaningfully playful. |
| Posted by JD Clay on 05/09/04 at 05:39 AM I like the way this one runs, Dave. Nonsensical yet descriptive in light-heartedness. Love that finish, too. Turn the heat up!
Pe4ce... |
| Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 05/10/04 at 02:04 AM Definitely "new fangled ways"! Imagery quite humorous! |
| Posted by Kate Demeree on 05/10/04 at 04:31 PM Ummm.... well... *ahem*.... I liked it... it leavs soooo much for the imaginative mind ot fill in.... *grin*.... Hope to see more of these! |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 05/10/04 at 07:31 PM I like how each neat combo of words can stand on its own as a poem, and in how their combining lead up to a remarkable sensual message. |
| Posted by Graeme Fielden on 05/12/04 at 01:58 PM looks like you've achieved mastery of the mixed and muddled metaphor, Dave..Hehe..clever & amusing! |
| Posted by Anne Engelen on 05/13/04 at 09:05 PM gotta love those experiments! Most enjoyable!! |
