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old fashioned words in newfangled ways

by David R Spellman

oh man and how
I wish I could just
spill
 
senseless and wishy
washing stuff like
reverbs from my
bulging cheeks
 
letting you cackle
on as if there
was something
 
there you were
bringing me noodles
and oodles cooked
 
no more or
less is best than
when the pan fried
 
saving the juices
letting them ooze
all over me
 
melted as if
butter couldn't run
until you set it free 
 

09/23/2003

Author's Note: experimental

Posted on 05/09/2004
Copyright © 2022 David R Spellman

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Michele Schottelkorb on 05/09/04 at 05:13 AM

this is incredibly clever... you can find the old phrases written anew... excellent poem... blessings...

Posted by Jean Mollett on 05/09/04 at 05:14 AM

Hi David, old fashioned words in newfangled ways, Hey very good. Quite clever. Not bad at all. I like it. And those words are just the startin of it.

Posted by Charles E Minshall on 05/09/04 at 05:19 AM

Good experiment Dave.....Charlie

Posted by Ashok Sharda on 05/09/04 at 05:32 AM

Yes, words? they mean what we mean them to mean as writers. Readers mean them based on their word experience and associations. This word play rather word usage of yours is meaningful. Its meaningfully playful.

Posted by JD Clay on 05/09/04 at 05:39 AM

I like the way this one runs, Dave. Nonsensical yet descriptive in light-heartedness. Love that finish, too. Turn the heat up! Pe4ce...

Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 05/10/04 at 02:04 AM

Definitely "new fangled ways"! Imagery quite humorous!

Posted by Kate Demeree on 05/10/04 at 04:31 PM

Ummm.... well... *ahem*.... I liked it... it leavs soooo much for the imaginative mind ot fill in.... *grin*.... Hope to see more of these!

Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 05/10/04 at 07:31 PM

I like how each neat combo of words can stand on its own as a poem, and in how their combining lead up to a remarkable sensual message.

Posted by Graeme Fielden on 05/12/04 at 01:58 PM

looks like you've achieved mastery of the mixed and muddled metaphor, Dave..Hehe..clever & amusing!

Posted by Anne Engelen on 05/13/04 at 09:05 PM

gotta love those experiments! Most enjoyable!!

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