| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Kate Demeree on 04/16/04 at 11:42 AM WOW.... from start to finish... WOW |
| Posted by Adrian Calhoun on 04/16/04 at 02:04 PM I always loved Haiku poems. This one is very well crafted. I like the way it breaks, and the images it boldly paints. Well done. |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 04/16/04 at 04:10 PM Refreshingly different as haikus go, especially with the punctuation Graeme. Would make an excellent opening poem to a short story or novel. |
| Posted by Katerina T Nix on 04/17/04 at 01:12 AM Very beautiful, Graeme. It is always a pleasure reading your work :)
Kat |
| Posted by Michele Schottelkorb on 04/17/04 at 05:23 PM this is a secret... perfect and whole... excellent graeme! |
| Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 04/18/04 at 02:27 AM Striking in its definition while so brief. That is what I like so much about Haiku. Great descriptive phrase, "Haltered breath". |
| Posted by David R Spellman on 04/19/04 at 11:00 PM You really capture well the whole intrigue and mystery behind the whispering of those secretive words. And in such few, well-chosen words. Great! |
| Posted by Anne Howe on 04/20/04 at 09:13 AM these words just hang on the breath or fade ethereally.....beautiful |
| Posted by Max Bouillet on 10/23/04 at 01:36 AM Silenced and shadowy and filled with dark secrets. Well crafted and excellent read. |
