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Give Me A Call (to T.A.)

by Melanie A Bennett

When you realize that you love me
That you want me in your life

When you wake up and you're lonely
Wishing I was by your side

When you know that I'm "the one"
Like I've known all along

Give me a call...
I'll leave my phone on for you

04/10/2004

Author's Note: To the man I want to spend forever with. From the girl you're not sure about...

Posted on 04/10/2004
Copyright © 2024 Melanie A Bennett

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Maureen Glaude on 04/10/04 at 09:58 PM

Sometimes both don't realize it at the same time. Hopefully he will in time. Well done

Posted by James Cavet on 04/11/04 at 01:33 AM

This is a short and sweet message. Really striking yet simple. I thought the last two lines ended a bit abrupt but re-reading it now, I can see how it works.

Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 04/12/04 at 08:50 PM

Very good poetics. If I may make a suggestion though...drop that last stanza. The line about leaving the phone on sounds awkward, as we all know the phone is always on. By dropping it, the next last stanza, in fact the whole poem reinforces the title. Otherwise, worthy capture of emotion, longing, and tension in its uncertainty.

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