Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 04/12/04 at 08:50 PM Very good poetics. If I may make a suggestion though...drop that last stanza. The line about leaving the phone on sounds awkward, as we all know the phone is always on. By dropping it, the next last stanza, in fact the whole poem reinforces the title. Otherwise, worthy capture of emotion, longing, and tension in its uncertainty. |