| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 03/27/04 at 03:37 PM Worthy analogy that could be applied to many different relationships. |
| Posted by J. P. Davies on 03/27/04 at 08:11 PM Sort of similar to my poem "If we go down, we go down together" about the end of my last long term relationship. I find the struggling together in the water analogy fits quite nicely. |
| Posted by J. P. Davies on 03/27/04 at 08:12 PM PS: I added this to my favourites |
| Posted by Michele Schottelkorb on 03/27/04 at 10:23 PM maureen, this is perfect... the way that you present the topic (divorce, or ending of a relationship) with the continually use of water as a foundation, is incredible... it makes the poem flow so nicely... then you add the somber aspect of the topic, lending a darkly surreal feeling... this poem is excellent... in fact, i'm voting for POTD... blessings... |
| Posted by Bruce W Niedt on 03/28/04 at 02:13 AM Excellent metaphor here, Maureen - I also like the image of other bodies floating around - not sure if they represent other relationships that have died, or other loved ones who suffer from the separation, but it's haunting nonetheless.... d:-) |
| Posted by Ashok Sharda on 03/29/04 at 11:17 AM 'there was too much of their own water
under their bridge
for them to survive
together'The what is is so distinct and pregnant with what should be -'the answer to all staying afloat was
only in keeping
apart'
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| Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 03/30/04 at 02:28 AM Complicated analogy to explain complicated life! For me the message is that sometimes love in and of itself is not enough. |
| Posted by Dana E Brossard on 03/30/04 at 07:34 PM Very nice Maureen =) A most enjoyable read. |
