rejected seed (haiku)

by Glenn Currier


below the feeder
gathers grass grown in winter
from rejected seed



Author's Note: it's probably not haikuish but sometimes alliteration happens

Posted on 03/17/2004
Copyright © 2023 Glenn Currier

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Kara Hayostek on 03/17/04 at 02:31 PM

Its fine, I like the haiku and alliteration (im no expert tho) but its a nice crisp image. Birds have a habit of eating only their favorites and discarding the rest. LOL

Posted by Ashok Sharda on 03/17/04 at 02:32 PM

'Rejected seed' sounds like an 'outsider'estranged from the common belief system for not believing in the common belief system. And well, one who isn't common is abnormal. Well, I do identify with this rejected seed.

Posted by Rula Shin on 03/17/04 at 02:57 PM

I like the poem although that green on brown made it difficult to read. I too first thought this poem might be about an ostracized individual...but instead it's about the seeds that are refused by the birds and how nature found a way to put them to use. Very creative indeed and very imaginative - I really like the originality of this piece :-)

Posted by Michele Schottelkorb on 03/18/04 at 05:42 AM

i think this is gorgeous... i see the underdog... winning... attaining that which is rightfully it's own... beautiful, glenn... blessings...

Posted by Thomas K. Hunt on 03/18/04 at 11:47 PM

great imagery

Posted by JD Clay on 03/20/04 at 06:08 PM

From above or below, this one definitely grows on you, despite the pecking order. Good stuff, Glenn. Pe4ce...

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