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the kiss
by Richard TrotterPresence, lilac through oil and dirt
perfect words made darkness a liar.
Breeze and release of the languid motions
of your tongue against mine, like a laser
to scan away pain and awaken flesh,
a coat of smooth explosive sugar.
Idyllic apologies followed
with the world a joyous child's toy. 02/07/2004 Posted on 02/07/2004
Copyright © 2025 Richard Trotter
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Sam Roberts on 02/08/04 at 12:44 PM wow, This is brilliant. Like Wendy pointed out, very suductive..beautiful infact.
"a coat of smooth explosive sugar" - lovely image
Stay beautiful xxx
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| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 02/08/04 at 02:53 PM Wonderful read made from wonderful lines throughout this, Richard. Perhaps a proof reading to fix typos like 'mione' in line 4, and reworking of other lines like the opening one, which sounds awkward, or complete deletion. The second line provides a much stronger opening. In any case, kudos! |
| Posted by Mara Meade on 02/09/04 at 10:48 PM Oh, the freshness and sweetness of it... like a spring breeze. very well said. |
| Posted by Gabrielle L Gervais on 02/10/04 at 05:32 PM wonderful 'languid motions' of words :) |
| Posted by Ginette T Belle on 02/19/04 at 01:52 AM mmmm...lovely...
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| Posted by Tony Whitaker on 03/09/07 at 10:55 PM This is in my favorites! Breathless! |
| Posted by Michelle Angelini on 06/06/07 at 02:11 AM Not sure I'll ever think of a kiss the same way (when and if I ever get one) but this is searingly sensual. CONGRATULATIONS on POTD!
~Chelle~ |
| Posted by JD Clay on 06/06/07 at 04:37 AM This is very stylish stuff, Richard. It�s full of sharp angles, twists and turns. I like that, it�s real and raw and full of life. Congratulations on your Poem Of The Day. |
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