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alice fell down a rabbit hole

by Michele Schottelkorb

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who goes there

into the twilight of my mind

 

(alice fell down a rabbit hole

to find a checkered past)

 

deep within the recesses

of tortured memories

and stained photographs

 

(to see what she could see

she bargained her very soul)

 

you seek substance

littered images gone awry

blown away by the merciless wind

 

(verses raped her being

with a flick off her fingertips)

 

blood stained thoughts

elude capture here

where the demons dwell

 

(pen in hand

she wrote her eulogy)

 

the twilight seems not

so pretty

where solace cannot be found

 

(with a deafening thud

a net was not waiting)

01/31/2004

Posted on 01/31/2004
Copyright © 2024 Michele Schottelkorb

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by JD Clay on 02/01/04 at 02:40 AM

A well-constructed poem within a poem. Tragic as it may seem, death has many faces. Pe4ce...

Posted by Dana E Brossard on 02/01/04 at 06:05 AM

Woah. Very nicely done =)

Posted by Daryl Fein on 02/01/04 at 03:24 PM

this is cool michelle, good prose:) peace out

Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 02/01/04 at 11:48 PM

Neat, well thought out update of that classic story, bringing into play personal turmoil, making me now wonder if that's not what the original story was about too. Kudos gal!

Posted by Sarah Graves on 05/05/04 at 11:42 PM

I really enjoyed reading this peice Michele. I'm currently reading "Alice's Adventures in Wonderland, and Alice through the Looking Glass and what she found there." Two great stories, but Alice annoys me most of the time; she's so pretentious and more so in the book :)

Posted by Ginette T Belle on 05/26/04 at 02:38 PM

dark, brooding, extremely effective

Posted by Marjorie Anne Reagan on 01/21/05 at 04:21 AM

The last two stanzas blow me away! Amazing stuff!

Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 02/11/05 at 02:51 AM

Antiphonal form intriguing. The symbolism also very effective.

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