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'Moonshine'
by Rula Shin
Her laughs of silver
Rain sang timeless vigil
For shadows unseen
Thunderous clamor,
Pearlies glowing,
Stretched mouth
A blaze
I felt her dark delight
And turned,
You wanna lay around the shanty, mamma?
Put a good buzz on?
She nods her bonfire head
Burning crimson red
And swallows down the flame
01/30/2004 Author's Note: Addiction is the erotic kiss of death. And here we are friends...lovingly feeding each other poison. (Quoted is a line from Jonathan Edwards "Shanty").
Posted on 01/31/2004
Copyright © 2024 Rula Shin
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Quinlan L Gibson on 01/31/04 at 05:13 PM this is beautifully spun Rula, |
| Posted by Ashok Sharda on 02/01/04 at 01:51 PM Oh! this is so american and so difficult for person like me who is so un-american and mis-fit in these modern ways of life. Though I wish to congratulate the poet in showing courage to stand againt swallowing 'down the flame. I agree, its luring, its erotic, in a sense but its poison. |
| Posted by David R Spellman on 02/01/04 at 03:30 PM I can feel the tug and temptation of addiction in this piece and loved the closing stanza especially. |
| Posted by David Neubauer on 02/02/04 at 03:33 PM Very nicely done. I really like the fact that this poem usues small lines, not running very long. It's got a good feel. |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 02/03/04 at 12:54 AM Evocative read Rula. Had me glowing with a soft smile. |
| Posted by Mara Meade on 02/04/04 at 02:09 AM a brutal temptress... oh yes, you captured her portrait well. |
| Posted by Maureen Glaude on 02/04/04 at 06:36 PM Death as seductress, powerfully portrayed here. Well done. How unique |
| Posted by Ginette T Belle on 02/05/04 at 02:34 AM absolutely lovely... |
| Posted by Thomas K. Hunt on 02/08/04 at 07:33 AM Very nice....welcome to Pathetic |
| Posted by Amy Niggel on 04/06/04 at 04:54 PM Your writing style is amazing, great form and very powerful ideas. Great job. |
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