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Bare And Aware
by Quinlan L GibsonThree years all fell into the past; unwrapped, made bare and exposed
Both to and for you in belief that mind controls heart; is this the start of it all?
Possessed,I feel I have left this past life and begun anew, solidified you; I am cleansed
Inside and out, what itÂ’s all about; the gift that keeps giving and IÂ’m living a dream.
The very same one that I wished on, thought to have wasted; I have tasted the power of love.
HeÂ’s consumed me, baptized in his core; Everything I asked for, itÂ’s surreal say the least.
Completely stripped down with a silvery lining; timing compliments perfection.
We walk same direction, verified our perception of how we want our life to be.
I no longer see you without me, my promises carry same weight and degree
you will get what you give twice fold, keep setting me up, how I love that you told me IÂ’m beautiful.
I am sold and surrender to mesh my life with yours, anywhere you will take me,
WeÂ’ve opened new doors, committed beyond rings and vows here and now.
I stop, smell the roses, plant more. 01/24/2004 Author's Note: new feelings, more new feelings. It's new for me to write dealing with new feelings, rather than the same old ones. Those old ones are gone now.
Posted on 01/24/2004
Copyright © 2024 Quinlan L Gibson
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Rula Shin on 01/25/04 at 02:00 AM "We’ve opened new doors, committed beyond rings and vows here and now. I stop, smell the roses, plant more." - such a beautiful and memorable last line in this enthusiatic love poem . This flows so nicely and had some brilliant lines, "I’m living a dream. The very same one that I wished on, thought to have wasted.." - such a powerful realization brought on by true love. This was awesome Quinlan :-)
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| Posted by Rachelle Howe on 01/25/04 at 04:57 AM there is much to be said for internal rhyme. when a verse is not based in its composition but maintained by the scheme. hm. i think that this has a great base and you could do lots with it. push the boundries of those emotions and see where it takes you. |
| Posted by Susan Q Tomas on 01/25/04 at 08:57 PM Beautiful flow. I really enjoyed this one. You are living the dream you wished on. Beautiful. |
| Posted by Anne Engelen on 01/25/04 at 10:36 PM what a hope giving poem Quin! |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 01/26/04 at 05:19 PM Sweet but not syrupy...I like. Lucky couple! I especially like the message in those last two lines...great way to close off. |
| Posted by Leslie Ann Eisenberg on 03/07/04 at 06:48 PM timing compliments perfection....and i love the last few lines. it is surely an art to know how to end a powerful piece, and you have nailed it. |
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