Wide Eyed Slumber
by Rula Shin
There reigned a Queen
with weighted rings
beneath her diamonds true
Her darling horse
sprang golden wings,
poor creature never flew!
And every night
queen lay to sleep
upon her marble bed,
But never knew
how hard it was,
not even when she bled
And ask this Queen
to choose a king
if ever one she knew;
Shell laugh and say
"have not to think,
Midas I pick you
Author's Note: I guess this kind of reads like a limerick...I also decided I'd try out some new grammatical suggestions..thanks Jack Rose for your help.
Posted on 01/22/2004
Copyright © 2023 Rula Shin
|Member Comments on this Poem|
|Posted by Ashok Sharda on 01/22/04 at 02:52 PM|
Yes, this reads like a limerick. The pun, the punch, the satire, the paradoxical reality of the dream world we are all so used to is so well pronounced. Despite this distinctness it has a subtlety.Not in the words, but in the paradoxical meaning. The simple realities of life are simple only when one realizes them. Ask the queen, Midas is not Midas but her dream king.
|Posted by Quinlan L Gibson on 01/25/04 at 01:38 AM|
fantastic fairytale unfolding...great job!
|Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 01/25/04 at 04:50 PM|
Has a playful nursery rhyme feel to it, and yet also a serious sad message in how one can be obsessed with material richness as opposed to spiritual. Well done!
|Posted by Kate Demeree on 01/28/04 at 05:43 PM|
There is much wisdom as well as playfulness in this poem. It was a very enjoyable read full of life's irony as well as subtle lessons.
|Posted by Michele Schottelkorb on 02/05/04 at 05:36 AM|
outstanding rhyme scheme... like an old world song... well done... blessings...
|Posted by JD Clay on 04/18/04 at 04:14 AM|
This is an extremely well turned verse, Rula. And who could blame a chick with her sights set high. I recall my father telling my sisters that it's just as easy to fall in love with a rich man as a poor one.
|Posted by Charles E Minshall on 04/21/04 at 03:06 AM|
Very good reading Rula. She wanted to live by
the golden rule I guess, One made of the metal...Charlie
|Posted by Amanda L Marron on 05/27/04 at 04:30 PM|
it flows so fluidly, i love it.....
|Posted by Amanda L Marron on 09/07/04 at 05:37 PM|
This is a great piece. I love the limericky feel to it.