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volcanic kisses

by Lindsay Sanders

A kiss may not be the truth, but it is what we wish were true. – Steve Martin

did you ever realize that                                                    each time you kissed my lips
you made me blind? it felt like                                            you killed brain cells; you were
an unprotected x-ray, leaving                                            an everlasting mark on my heart.
smoldered kisses on each of my tender                             nerves burst like fireworks that melt,
irises, as you induced volcanic teardrops                           burning my pale skin, leaving me forever
scarring my own star-bit face. i was                                   blind. i kept searching through my pain, kept
pleading for your touch, always crying,                              craving your torrid embrace when you left me without my
wet tears as you grimly took away the star-                      light. {i fear the dark.} in my addiction, you were the
warmth by which i survived. i clung to the                          lies that smothered me. you vomited fulsome words,
words that fueled the world that i believed                        so passionately in my mind. your kiss made me believe that all
was real. your eyes featured volcanoes; they always        sparkled, obscuring your façade. i knew your saliva was like lava, that
scorched me and burned my tongue.                                  it gleamed with lies. your deceitfulness and
the mask on your face melted me to ash.                           your deception has left me forever scarred.

01/08/2004

Author's Note: (update on 7/20/2010) 6.5 years later, despite the fact all the teen angst that seems so melodramatic to me now, I am still proud of this poem. I spent a lot of time perfecting this when I was 17 and it will always serve to remind me how much I love crafting a poem that demands both emotion and meticulousness.

this was the most difficult piece i have ever written, but it is satisfying to know that i conveyed one thought in 3 poems in one (each seperate poem and the across each entire line to create one big poem altogether). the puntuation in red means that it only works for reading it one of the 3 ways. i entered it into the january teen patron poetry contest.

Posted on 01/08/2004
Copyright © 2025 Lindsay Sanders

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Stephanie Kent on 01/09/04 at 04:04 AM

"as you induced volcanic teardrops leaving me forever scarring my own star-bit face". . .another masterpiece that leaves me without words. This moved me to tears.

Posted by Agnes Eva on 01/09/04 at 11:40 PM

excellent poem. it truly does work all 3 ways. best use of title i've seen in a while. :::wow the concept of volcanic kisses::: i hope this wins the contest hands down. so much erupting out of one simple action... as anyone that's had a fantastic kiss will know

Posted by J. P. Davies on 01/18/04 at 08:58 AM

Wow, this is absolutely incredible. I read it all as one poem first then read the other two and I loved them all...it was amazing to read the same words twice and find completely different meaning in them. I thought this contest was my best chance to win, but I think you just blew me out of the water...

Posted by Becca Morton on 01/20/04 at 05:50 PM

this is amazing - it brought tears to my eyes but a smile to my face. Its so perfectly alligned and every second that I read through it all i could do was think how realy it seeed. perfect. i love it

Posted by Cathlyn Cartier on 01/25/04 at 04:01 PM

Lindsay, beautiful verse, and great form... one suggestion... alternate to italic text, as the poem lines don't format completely for some.... even when I optimize screen space,the lines don't quite break where they are supposed to

Posted by Rachelle Howe on 01/26/04 at 02:25 PM

*JAW DROP.* YOU GENIUS, YOU. ENTER. ENTER IT NOW.

Posted by Jeanne Marie Hoffman on 01/28/04 at 05:01 PM

Congrats on 1st place! I love how you crafted the form in this--extremely creative idea!

Posted by Maureen Glaude on 02/02/04 at 09:09 PM

very well done, and ingenious. congrats

Posted by Wendy Geal on 06/21/04 at 11:10 PM

this is an amazing, beautiful piece

Posted by Brett Shane on 12/01/04 at 10:40 AM

wow, this... is.. amazing.. and gorgeous.. and.. wow... awesome

Posted by Jared Fladeland on 02/05/08 at 03:56 AM

Okay. poems like this, that really test and break through structures, instant orgasm for me. You've won me. I'm yours forever. this worked SOOOOO friggin' well. you rock.

Posted by Mo Couts on 08/22/11 at 01:53 AM

This is absolutely genius! WOW!

Posted by Morgan D Hafele on 11/13/11 at 09:47 PM

a very powerful piece indeed. i can feel the work that went into it and am familiar with the burn of deceit in a kiss.

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