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love story
by Laura Doom
the smell of you upon my lips
your heat between my fingertips
the very instant I awake
a habit I am loath to break
your inspiration stimulates
a cloud of thought that elevates
my lust for life, my fear of death
a fire that leaves me short of breath
I crave your calming influence
and, though I'm told it makes no sense
my head ignores the warning signs
despite the fact my heart declines e
t
I die as I expel your waste t
when, in your absence, I can taste e
a fragrance in the air, and yet... r
a
g
i need another c i
11/09/2003 Posted on 11/09/2003
Copyright © 2024 Laura Doom
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 11/10/03 at 07:17 PM LOL! At first I thought this would be yet another incestuous relationship poem. Very clever! |
| Posted by Max Bouillet on 11/10/03 at 11:28 PM Complex form and exquiste imagery combine into a very detailed memory. One that uses all the senses. Great verse. |
| Posted by Quinlan L Gibson on 11/11/03 at 06:15 PM Laura this is truly fantastic! I love your form in this piece. |
| Posted by Michele Schottelkorb on 11/16/03 at 03:40 AM this is incredible... a heartfelt, albeit difficult, poem to write, i am sure... your talent for description and imagery and emotion blows me away with this piece... excellent form and an incredible write... blessings... |
| Posted by Mara Meade on 11/16/03 at 08:00 PM Sad that something so sensory can be so bad for you. I love the way you curled the cigarette smoke up around the body of the poem. Woo-hoo, girl, you've got a good one here. |
| Posted by Susan Q Tomas on 11/17/03 at 03:19 AM Laura, you are amazing. |
| Posted by Ginette T Belle on 11/18/03 at 04:10 AM love the first stanza especially...very well written... |
| Posted by Quinn Vokes on 08/10/04 at 01:01 AM amazing!! |
| Posted by Richard Vince on 07/10/07 at 06:27 PM wow. marvellous, in an "if only it were not so" sort of a sense. what odd creatures we are. thank you for a wry smile. |
| Posted by V. Blake on 10/14/10 at 10:24 PM Found this in random member favorites. I can certainly see how it got there! |
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