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I don't want to be
by Michele Schottelkorb
“I don’t want to be WE”
“I want to be ME”
“I told you this last week”
“Don’t you hear ME?”
The dismantling of our little family
Five years in the making
The pain that permeates
Is gold for the taking
Struggles and tears
Mean nothing in the end
A black-holed heart
Is too difficult to mend
If I could
Take all of it back
IÂ’d do it all different
IÂ’d plan an attack
On those that would corrupt
Our little endeavor
IÂ’d take back my family
And compromise never
But, alas, never is here
And all I have left is one little tearÂ…
10/25/2003 Posted on 10/26/2003
Copyright © 2024 Michele Schottelkorb
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Max Bouillet on 10/26/03 at 04:24 AM There is so much pain in this that it is hard not to feel despair when reading it! Emotional release well placed in verse! |
| Posted by Daryl Fein on 10/28/03 at 08:48 AM all i can say is im sorry. you know i got your back. |
| Posted by Laura Doom on 10/28/03 at 08:26 PM "If I could
Take all of it back
I’d do it all different"
One of those sentiments that defies the school of 'positive thinking' - but for most of us, I believe it's true.
Don't know if this is personal experience - whether it is or not, it's utterly convincing and emotive.
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| Posted by Ashok Sharda on 10/29/03 at 02:23 AM 'But, alas, never is here', this realization should lead one to yet another realization and that is that despite all the painfully alive associations whats left is here part of now and one dies from moment to moment as one lives from moment to moment.And its always good to live in the present with the present rather than in the past with the past. Though the piece is titled as 'I don't want to be' , paradoxically this very poem is part of the struggle to BE.'Struggles and tears Mean nothing in the end', yet another realization, rather application of logic, proof of the presence of the intellectual self despite all the emotions.
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| Posted by Karl Waldbauer on 10/29/03 at 08:05 AM Due to the intense and beautifully expressed emotion in this piece, all I can say is EXCELLENT. |
| Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 10/29/03 at 12:05 PM one little tear and beautifully rendered. |
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