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Valley of Death Escape

by Michele Schottelkorb

I walked along the Valley of Death

(how arrogant to think I was alone!)

and noticed

the saddened souls littering the floor

reaching out

for a grain of star-dust

 

but, alasÂ…

their arms would not reach

could not see

beyond this life

 

for they forgot:

you must BE to SEEÂ… you must SEE to BE...

...I made it to the other endÂ…

10/04/2003

Author's Note: this poem is inspired by Ashok Sharda's excellent poem "A Tragic Piece – ‘you have to BE to SEE" in his PRose-Poetry folder... it inspired me beyond belief and i felt compelled to write this... thank you, dear friend...

Posted on 10/05/2003
Copyright © 2024 Michele Schottelkorb

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Ashok Sharda on 10/05/03 at 06:30 AM

There's one moment which belongs to you. Which even the death can not take away from you, and that is this very moment. The moment of BEING and SEEING. Yes, you have to Be to SEE. You have to SEE to BE. To make it to the other end. All the best. And thanks. You are a kind person.

Posted by Anne Engelen on 10/05/03 at 05:27 PM

yep...something I had to see! Great read. ty

Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 10/06/03 at 01:32 PM

this, in its fineries, trapped me like a rat. and how he fattens on your boundless words.

Posted by Don Coffman on 10/07/03 at 07:42 PM

Excellent poetry here, it carries with it a lot of thoughtful imagery and a good message.

Posted by Cole Miller on 10/08/03 at 08:15 PM

this is a great piece inspired by a great piece.. poetry is just amazing like that...

Posted by H.M Stevens on 11/19/03 at 06:28 AM

dearest~ this is wonderful....thank you thank you...such a magical touch have you....

Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 11/20/03 at 12:53 AM

Thought provoking to say the least. Congratulations on POTD!

Posted by Amanda J Cobb on 11/20/03 at 03:59 AM

"reaching out for a grain of star-dust" - wonderful, evocative imagery here. Well-done overall. :) Congrats on Poem of the Day.

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