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into the sun

by Lindsay Sanders

desiccated leaves crackle
under her cautious footsteps.
vigilance flashes in her anxious eyes;
irises gleaming apprehensively with each
calculated step forward. fearfully glancing
at the vast field that lay before her, she shies
away from the brilliant sunlight, as if afraid of
enlightenment. ever deliberating, she longingly
gazes back at dim, murky, forest and itÂ’s
numerous hiding places. possessing the
timidity of a young deer, ultra-cognizant
of waiting hunters, she slowly
steps into the light.

09/18/2003

Author's Note: sometimes it's easier to hide, but when you finally get the courage to make that first step forward, your whole view changes.

Posted on 09/19/2003
Copyright © 2024 Lindsay Sanders

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Rachelle Howe on 10/16/03 at 07:32 PM

she longing gazes back at dim, murky, forest and it s

should perhaps be longingly? just a thought. other than that, this was well crafted. thanks for posting.

Posted by Agnes Eva on 11/01/03 at 10:12 PM

yes, i like the metaphoric implications of this, you've seamlessly merged the nature scene with human nature. the poem leaves me with questions (if you wanted to add another layer, for example if you were to have a title that explains what this is a metaphor for that would be great (like Opening Night, for a play, or First Day of High School, or anything.. that would be cool). Leaving it open to interpretation the way it is, is great too, it conjures for me that feeling that women get of putting their beautiful selves out in the world for others to notice (a realisation of self).

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