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02. in creation
by Jason Wardellwith a wave, a swirl
hand dipped into blue unknown
held fast to ship's hull 09/02/2003 Author's Note: doombly... split 'em up, but decided to keep this intact 'cause it has bunches of comments. also, this one seemed to be the most popular.
Posted on 09/02/2003
Copyright © 2024 Jason Wardell
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Don Coffman on 09/02/03 at 11:48 PM I agree, they're excellent, and the flow between the lines is great, relative to most haikus that seem to be done as 3 grouped statements rather than a whole. Good luck in the contest. :) |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 09/04/03 at 04:52 PM Thought provoking pieces. I especially like the second one. |
| Posted by Brian Francis on 09/06/03 at 11:58 PM I would have to say it's a go -- enter them. Nice work wiley.
Peace
--bf |
| Posted by Jeanne Marie Hoffman on 11/06/03 at 07:24 PM I like this one the best myself ;) |
| Posted by Kalikala Smith on 01/08/04 at 03:43 AM makes me think of those little ships in glass bottles, with dyed blue water swirling around. |
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