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FIRST DATE (Prose)

by Graeme Fielden

I'd been waiting for quite some time. To long in fact. And to tell the truth it took some planning - lots of planning - and now the big day's here and I'm anxious like a boxer stepping into the ring.

For months I'd watched her from afar. Until my transfer to her floor where I could study her more closely.

I watched her movements. Everything! I knew what she ate for lunch, and how she took her
coffee. I knew the perfume she wore on Monday's and when she did aerobics at the gym. I knew her entirely before I dared make my move.

I was certain that she'd noticed me too. Like the other girls in the office she would think me a little quiet and quirky, which was okay. Techie's are a meant to be quirky. Girls like quirky! I read that in a glossy magazine.

I caught her eye from time to time; over the top of the partition or at the copier. Still I waited for I knew there'd be a better time when I'd feel more confident.

I'd join a gym soon. Yes! Then I'd definitely talk to her. We'd have something in common.

I pictured us training together. My hands around her small waist, her buttocks clenched and groaning as she pushed the weight up harder and harder. "Yes...Yes", I screamed as I nuzzled closely to her perfumed neck that glistened with perspiration. "Phew!"

I was never good with first contact. My palms would itch and sweat and my under arms would flood, making me round my shoulders to hide the marks appearing in my shirt. My brow would crease involuntarily and I'd feel the tickle of sweat slowly drip down my neck to stain my collar. I'd mumble, confusing, choking my words; sometimes developing
a stammer so I would catch upon a word for a minute while my embarrassed audience looks on, eager to j...jum...jump in to help me finish.

The day came sooner than expected. As usual I arrived early into work.

I'd developed something of a repartee with the cleaner, Bill, who was a Bull's fan like me. We'd chat in the foyer before I'd catch the elevator up to the forty-second. That morning Bill was in a particularly chatty mood. Something about a car crash down on Seventh and Bill wanted to talk so bad that it seemed forever till he took a breath

"Gotta go to work Bill," I said apologetically.

Bill was still talking as I stepped into the elevator so I almost didn't notice her there as I walked through the doors.

My heart jumped as though I'd touched a power main so I looked immediately to the
floor, studying a patch on the toe of my boot where I had not scraped the polish so it sat like a booger waiting to be picked. My palms became moist so I gripped them like a rope and hunched my shoulders as I felt the moisture accumulate then start running down my side.

"You're on forty-second?" she said quietly with that accent I'd heard only spoken to others.

It seemed softer, more sensual and sophisticated now it was directed at me.

"Umm, yeah," I said as I slowly looked upwards from my shoes.

Tech support, right?" she asked.

"Umm, yeah", I mumbled.

She was even more beautiful this close. Her hair was black as ebony. Her eyes - dark and alluring, like a winter moon. Her honey-coloured skin shone under the fluorescence of the elevator lights. I could imagine tasting that skin.      

"Mmm"

"I've got a problem with my system. Perhaps you could take a look?"

"Umm, y-yeah," I spat out as though chewing a gumball. "I'm kinda busy 'til lunch. Perhaps we could have a look at it over... over lunch?"

She looked at me and it was then I saw that glint in her eye. The silent smirk I get from women as though they're holding back laughter. It makes me so angry!

"Sounds great! I'll grab you a b-bagel," she said with a laugh. "By the way, my name's Tina."

That was a month ago now, and who'd have imagined it would have led to this?

She liked asian vegetables. I knew that from way back. A week ago I went to Little China and almost cleared the cookbooks from Mr Lee's book shelves, learning the secrets of bok choi and Chinese Lettuce, I practised a new dish each night. I bought a wok, new dishes and chopsticks, which I took to work and practised with at lunchtime. On Thursday I set the table, and shook my head with disappointment. "Noooo!" Time for a new table, perhaps some bamboo mats!

It's six o'clock now and she's due at seven. The table's laid perfect with the candles left to burn for a while so that they did not have that just bought look. I take a shower and a shave, collecting my new Armani shirt, laying it upon the bed, which I straighten, fluffing the pillows before slapping the CK 1 into my cheeks. "Ouch!"   

It's now exactly seven and I'm checking the pots, cautiously lifting the lid, sampling the main course to make sure it's just right.

"Mmm..." better than just right. Beyond all expectation. So soft and tender it falls right off the bone and melts in your mouth.

It turns out I was right. Tina tastes just perfect!

09/01/2003

Posted on 09/01/2003
Copyright © 2024 Graeme Fielden

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 09/01/03 at 11:37 AM

Ohhhh! quirky!!!!!! The ending should have been no surprise after reading a couple of your other writings, but I was taken quite by surprise! Gaggingly so!

Posted by Anne Engelen on 09/02/03 at 10:34 AM

Gosh Graeme..Your stories are so tasty!! They really keep one in suspense and make one so eagerly to know the outcome of them. Absolutely love it!!

Posted by Ashok Sharda on 09/03/03 at 02:10 PM

Yes, 'its just perfect','better than just right'. 'Soft and tender'and 'beyond all expectations'. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it. Thanks Graeme

Posted by Max Bouillet on 09/03/03 at 03:48 PM

Quiet and quirky and a wee bit psychotic. Excellent story with a great scorpion twist. Excellent read.

Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 09/03/03 at 04:45 PM

Down right ghoulish if you ask me! Talk about an unexpected ending!! LOL!!!

Posted by Kate Demeree on 09/04/03 at 01:11 PM

I loved the sensual feeling through the whole read.. and the ending was a perfect twist... Very Inventive!

Posted by Brian Francis on 09/06/03 at 03:22 AM

A bit "Dahmeresque" wouldn't you say. The ending was like a sick little slap in the face, Well done! -bf

Posted by JD Clay on 09/09/03 at 03:06 AM

A mesmerizing tale if ever there was one, Graeme. My kinda feast, hehe! A tasty dish, I'd say. Peace...

Posted by Alex Smyth on 09/15/03 at 01:22 AM

And what a twist! The best thing is I never saw it coming, but went back and saw every thing leading up to it the second time. Lovely, in a sick sort of way:o)

Posted by Don Coffman on 10/17/03 at 02:27 AM

Deliciously twisted, and a great story to remember for the Halloween season.

Posted by Jeanne Marie Hoffman on 11/21/03 at 04:55 PM

My gosh, you are one psychotic man ;) But it makes for excellent reading! Before I got to the last part of it, I was wondering if you were writing soft tales suddenly! But nope, there was that twist, and it stung me out right! great job!

Posted by Katerina T Nix on 11/24/03 at 07:01 AM

did you really have to eat her, Graeme, really??? just kiding, great piece mate. two enthusiastic thumbs up from this aussie girl. kat :)

Posted by Michele Schottelkorb on 03/25/04 at 10:03 AM

oh, you are like the crypt keeper... this is wickedly twisted... awesome imagination... blessings...

Posted by Morgan D Hafele on 02/15/05 at 12:34 PM

haha... maybe it's wrong to laugh, but eh... you have a way with the twisted ending. ...and he was such a nice guy, never saw it coming.

Posted by Jared Winkler on 03/08/05 at 09:48 AM

Fantastic... I love twisted stories, and this was awesome... I can't wait to read more of your stuff!

Posted by Michelle Angelini on 08/21/06 at 03:14 AM

Of all your stories that I had to read while eating dinner...yikes! It's got that distinctive Fielden touch. ;-)
~Chelle~

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