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iridescent
by Richard Paez
oil black
reflecting the hues
that have blinded me
to all i once knew
a spiral-inward turning path
questions to answers lost in the past
the oil black memory spreads
animal instinct rears its head
i wonder how i wonder why
i look inside and see your eyes
i wonder how i wonder why
i look inside and see your iridescent~
oil black
memory spreads
across me
and all i once knew
a spiral-inward turning path
answers to questions lost in the past
the oil black memory spreads
animal instinct drowning- dead
i wonder how i wonder why
i look inside and see your eyes
i wonder how i wonder why
i look inside and see your iridescent eyes
the one thing
that keeps me from knowing
the one thing
that keeps me alive
deep down
inside and flowing
this oil black
iridescent~
one thing
keeps me abating
one thing
beats in my mind
deep down
alive and knowing
your oil black
iridescent
eyes 08/30/2003 Posted on 08/31/2003
Copyright © 2026 Richard Paez
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Don Coffman on 09/04/03 at 09:33 PM Fascinating imagery with a flow and pace that's superb. To repeat the previous comments: lovely, definitely a good description. |
| Posted by Christel Crews on 09/07/03 at 06:03 PM this is beautiful and it has an amazing flow to it. i was easily lost in the imagery. great piece |
| Posted by Indigo Tempesta on 09/07/03 at 09:41 PM beautiful. i, too, may put this upon the wall of my little room, to sing to whatever tune i can come up with. :) thank you. |
| Posted by Beth K Hannah on 09/08/03 at 01:25 AM lovely...such a fantastic beauty to it. |
| Posted by Teri T Lahmon on 09/09/03 at 12:54 PM you have a subtle and skillful way of drawing your readers into the experience you're writing about, I admire it. As previously said very lovely and lyrical poem, I love the rhythm of it. It had a kind of "trapped" undertone to it, but I thought that may have just been me projecting some of my own issues on it :-). Thanks for sharing. ~T |
| Posted by JD Clay on 09/26/03 at 12:11 PM Your pearlescent poem definitely presents a rainbow of expressions by leaving the reader open to interpretation, then allowing them to draw their own conclusion from those oil black iridescent eyes, while the offset structure sets a tone of opposing views or perhaps a split personality. Altogether, a very subjective Poem of the Day, malachi. Congratulations!
Peace... |
| Posted by Michele Schottelkorb on 09/26/03 at 01:55 PM this is truly amazing... the flow is perfect, the images are vivid... almost like a song... it is dark and beautiful... blessings... |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 09/26/03 at 06:04 PM Bewitching read Richard. Quite lyrical. Congrats on POTD! |
| Posted by Jason Wardell on 09/27/03 at 05:31 AM a marvelous read, it's almost over too quickly. i blame the flow for this, you should be ashamed! ;) congrats on POTD for the next 30 minutes mountain standard time. |
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