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Masquerade - Night 1 (Edited Version)

by Graeme Fielden

If you are following my chronicles then perhaps you will notice that my hand is quite shaky and my writing has taken a character like an old man’s many times my age. Even now my nerves feel jaded from the events of this week; and as I write I feel that my constitution is stretched beyond all reason and it is all that I can do to keep myself together to record these events.
Were it not me who bore witness to these happenings then I would not believe them – I would construe them the rambling’s of a deranged mind or a work of pure fiction.
For this reason, at the outset, I will swear to you on the strength of my own eternal soul that the words that you shall read are a true and just account of the happenings of this week. I swear that I am not effected by any drink or hallucinogen; nor can my sanity be called to question as will be certified by any medical practitioner that you may seek to nominate.
To begin I assumed it as a dream. I was seated at my desk, working to the light of a gas lamp that flickered, throwing long shadows about the room. The clock within the hallway rang twelve then continued the slow echoed ticking that gives such solace as I work late into the night.
The housekeeper, Mrs. Jenkins, left a pot of tea upon the mantle. It remained untouched and cold - I was so enamoured by my work that I could not afford any type of distraction.
I considered a critical passage of my writing then lay my head upon the desktop, placing my quill to the side, folding my tired eyes into my arms… I rolled the plot through my head, affirming its course before setting it to the page. It was then, whilst in deepest thought, that it occurred to me that I was not alone.
There is a feeling that one gets when uninvited eyes invade personal space. Like breath upon the neck or an insect's touch to naked skin - it causes the skin to crawl and the hair follicles to freeze…
I rested my head within my hands, feeling my heartbeat rise slowly and small beads of sweat accumulate as I spied about the room. A curtain billowed gently - sweeping unnaturally (I knew the window to be double-glazed and double locked). I lunged forward, seizing it to reveal my reflection within the glass.
A cloud of smoke appeared before me. Slowly growing it took shape, condensing like a tropical storm. A face appeared - first vague and undefined, its definition grew with each passing second. I closed my eyes tightly, shaking my head in disbelief whilst fanning fresh air toward me. I drew a breath and slowly opened my eyes.
First eyes appeared and then a nose; a mouth smiling blankly like a Cheshire cat. The eyes were red and grizzled - they danced unnaturally, stealing manic glances about the room. My scream was silent and internal - staring in morbid fascination at the spectre until its eyes rolled backward, closing its lids like a keeper to Hells gate.
I buried my eyes into my palms, seeking release from this nightmare; wheezing then collapsing to the desk where I lay silent until the clock rang once.
…“Gong!”…
…the echo reverberated about the room…
The face hung suspended like a reflection. Staring blindly. It’s billowed cheeks expanded and contracted with each slaughtered breath. The skin was green, decaying like rancid fruit, it begat a smell so foul that it forced me to wretch. Frenzy overtook me and I formed a fist, lashing out like a striking snake…
It dropped lightly to the desk like a dead moth. I stared at it and it returned my stare from empty sockets where the manic eyes had rested. Its nostrils dull and still. Its cheeks now tamed to the servitude of a mask - inanimate and dumb. I considered it gently, cradling it within my hands like a surgeon.
It was a mask of Venetian styling - contorted like a Leonardo sketch - a disfigured celebration of the human visage. Its twisted smile supported a heavy lower lip over scattered teeth that revealed themselves at severe angles.
I held the mask within my hand, examining it slowly… turning it over and over… Was this the spectre of minutes earlier? … From where did it appear? … Was it all the fiction of a dream?…a nightmare? Such questions ran maniacally about my head…
I held the mask up to my face…And that is all that I remember for next I was woken as the morning sun shone through the scattered curtains and the clock rang soundly. I searched crazily about my desk, scattering the manuscript to the corners of the room until satisfied that the mask was no where to be found…

08/04/2003

Author's Note: My first attempt at horror fiction...this is a work in progress that I will add to daily until the conclusion of the story...comments and critique are very welcome

Posted on 08/04/2003
Copyright © 2026 Graeme Fielden

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Max Bouillet on 08/04/03 at 04:45 PM

Gave me the chills. Vivid scene depiction. I could very easily see what was placed in my mind. The only things I noticed was the lines: "The skin was like green and it peeled like rotting fruit. It begat a smell so foul that it forced me to reach" I don't think you need the word “like” before the word “green” and I believe that you want “wretch” and not “reach.” Other than that, the content was exquisite.

Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 08/05/03 at 02:12 PM

This is a chiller! Written in the Gothic style I believe. You caught my attention in the first sentence and kept it until the last sentence. It appears with the last sentence to have been a horrible nightmare. But you say there is more to come. I just don't think I will read it late at night. LOL!

Posted by Anne Engelen on 08/08/03 at 03:33 PM

Totally captured by this story. Great suspense!

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