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Don't
by Traci Mabatstouch, touch, touch
touch my face but
don't look into my eyes
they're vacant
I don't want you to see the emptiness there
hold, hold, hold
hold my head in your hands but
don't whisper in my ears
they're deaf
Please, just stick to running your fingers through my hair
talk, talk, talk
talk about your dreams but
don't inquire of mine
they're meaningless
And there are things I'd rather you not hear
tell, tell, tell
tell me that you love me but
don't ask if I love you
I'm afraid
And my feelings for you are unclear
rap, rap, rap
rap your knuckles on my door but
don't expect an answer
no one lives here anymore
Go away and bother someone else 05/28/2003 Author's Note: This is another rather old one of mine. In the second stanza or whatever you call that I was thinking of changing it to whisper sweet nothings in my ear but Im not sure. Feel free to give your opinion, I know youre out there!
Posted on 05/28/2003
Copyright © 2025 Traci Mabats
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Jeanne Marie Hoffman on 05/28/03 at 04:53 PM It flows better with your possible change, but you saw a few lines above, "Dont whisper". I don't know if you want that contradiction. If you are changing it for flow reasons you could possibly cut off part of the beginning and start with "Just run your..." Great start though! |
| Posted by Ashok Sharda on 05/28/03 at 05:40 PM 'no one lives here anymore
Go away and bother someone else' the msg. is ample clear and you have said this in a positive way. One can say no by uttering a yes. |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 05/28/03 at 06:17 PM Although the last line seems a little too extreme when matched with the rest of the poem, on the whole I think it's a very good example of how we're often afraid to commit to someone else, even when everything else seems right. |
| Posted by Quinlan L Gibson on 05/30/03 at 01:46 PM Oh I love this piece! I so know some of these feelings, glad to see someone got it out! |
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