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Inarticulate love song
by Sarah Brookes
Gazing at words in
their paper capsules
languid on pages
expressionlessly
monotone and drab;
Meaningsensualnothingness
blotched ph(enomenal)eromones
{I do. Will do. Have done.}
Its meaning lost in translation.
You see,
it should show that
(Oh God), that
heartfelt shudder; that
torrent of I ,it
bleeds from willingwounded
as though it were
monsoon season, leaves
you drenched, leaking mascara
splotched,
stained,
shivering,
spread too thinly
and loving every moment
sinking into liquid sunlight.
But it never does.
Never can quite,
never will
. Look, it's
Like photocopies,
a shade of its truth
Anyway, what I mean...
Just understand this:
that I am in love
and this is what it is like, or
at least what it is like
in words.
05/21/2003 Author's Note: I hate writing love poems; the problem is that I feel there are some emotions that really do not translate to paper well. It's impossible to really show anything more than a shadow of the intensity of some feelings, and that frustrates me.
This is not an easy poem to read, wasn't easy to squeeze out either. Its still very rough. But the lack of natural flow is intentional. As is the lack of description in comparison to some of my other junk.
anyway. Make of it what you will, criticise and pull it to pieces.
Posted on 05/21/2003
Copyright © 2024 Sarah Brookes
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by David R Spellman on 05/22/03 at 02:32 PM It really is difficult to capture the essence and feel of what it is you want to express sometimes. Like photos that can never really do a subject complete justice. You certainly capture well here the intense desire to do so. Well done. |
| Posted by Melissa Arel on 05/22/03 at 07:10 PM I agree with the others.. your words were perfect for this piece. Great work, Sarah. :) |
| Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 05/25/03 at 01:54 AM Obviously you've projected your emotions well. Intensity of feeling can never be fully expressed in words. But you've expressed the frustration of trying--which is an indication of the strength of the feelings. |
| Posted by Richard Vince on 10/30/07 at 07:29 PM wow. this is fabulous. how did it escape me? i know what you mean, and i feel similarly about words just not doing justice to such feelings, and yet as you well know i continue to try. you've captured perfectly that feeling of verbal impotence; successfully expressed the feeling of being unable to express. quite a feat. |
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