We Drowned Beneath the Winter Sky

by Alastre Zidler

My sweet companion -
Driven by fate to take me!
Our time spattered away
Into the greying snow,
Red as a valiant heart,
As a weeping wound.
Oh, If there were hammers
Designed to dash away
The emotional
Rather than the physical!

Clinging to you
With reckless abandon,
Emaciated, driven by fate,
So much was sacrificed
For this drowning embrace,
So much I gave up
For a chance to love you,
A chance to share
Your sweet breath
In shackles, descending
To the void of this
Fathomless ocean bed.


Posted on 05/18/2003
Copyright © 2020 Alastre Zidler

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Alex Smyth on 05/20/03 at 04:41 AM

"Driven by fate to take me" may be my favorite line. Do I detect a hint of self deprecation? Quite refreshing to see a great depth of expression balanced just shy of dramatic overload! Yep, this library is definately bookmarked...

Posted by Melissa Arel on 05/22/03 at 07:03 PM

I agree with all the others' comments. This is a sincere, romantic writing.. it captures loves' essence. Great work. :)

Posted by Alison McKenzie on 07/09/04 at 04:47 PM

Have you been living my life? And I wonder why we do it, "Clinging to you..emaciated, driven by fate..." I've let go just in time, or that ocean might have been my grave as well. Your imager is so touchable, like an excellent movie where the view is unable to maintain any aesthetic distance.

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