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Devastation by Jacki M ButlerMy friend You Kiss me I push you away You keep coming back Won't you please leave I want to scream I am paralyzed My words are trapped SOMEONE HELP ME Why won't you leave Tears are falling What is happening to me Did I do something wrong Why won't you stop You were my friend God, Give me strength to survive. 11/26/2002 Author's Note: This is for anyone who has ever survived something....God will take care of us all.
Posted on 11/27/2002 Copyright © 2026 Jacki M Butler
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| Posted by Christina Bruno on 11/27/02 at 06:27 AM I can completely relate to this |
| Posted by Rusty C Arquette on 11/27/02 at 12:46 PM Poetry can certainly be a form of catharsis for all the traumas of life...a way to purge the demons that attach themselves to our psyches. - My writing professor way back in the dark ages of the polyester 70's offered the advice that this is an excellent way to divest yourself of all the excess baggage that we lug around with us. After we can get past this point, poetry takes on a wider scope and opens up a larger readership. - In "Devastation" I feel I have an idea of what the traumatic experience might have been that was the cause, but you left it vague...purposefully no doubt, and maybe its because I'm reading from a male perspective, but I was a bit lost. - I love using various forms of font and size in my work as well, although I haven't been doing a lot of it lately (I think the term for this sort of form is "concrete")...I can see where the single spacing would have created a more unified flow to this piece; keep working at that line break, it may be correctable yet. - RCat |
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