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Sappy Love Song
by Cathlyn CartierDoncha know that I love ya
Cancha feel what I feel
Woncha say you'll stay forever
That what we have is really real.
Doncha know that I'm dyin'
Cancha see that I'm cryin'
Woncha stop what you've been doin'
Hold me close and help me heal.
Doncha know my heart's been breakin'
Cancha tell for you I'm achin'
Woncha quit the game you're playin,
Stop before it's way too late.
Don't leave me alone,
I can't make it on my own,
My heart won't mend so easily,
Don't turn away, don't flee from me.
11/16/2002 Posted on 11/17/2002
Copyright © 2024 Cathlyn Cartier
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Christina Bruno on 11/17/02 at 05:35 PM I love the rhythmn of these lyrics, would make a great song |
| Posted by Anne Howe on 11/17/02 at 08:38 PM the very effective use of dialect creates an excellent beat and the sudden change to non-dialect in the last stanza makes it all the more poignant ......... :) |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 11/20/02 at 07:07 PM Hmmm...sounds pretty good, maybe a chrous to lengthen it in-between the main verses. |
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