Poetry Clinic
06/19/2003 02:42 p.m.
I was going to put Angel's Pond on the poetry clinic and was typing already a new post when I decided against it. Im not satisfied with the last two lines of it so the clinic might help me but the poem has a lot of comments already. I do not want people to think I'm just after more comments *sigh* (i want suggestions at this point, people already told me the poem is good anyway lol). SO if anyone out there is reading this please make a suggestion especially on the last two lines. They're not as "ethereal" as they should be.