BPOM
05/24/2003 03:18 p.m.
Famida Basheer's IM about Broken Pieces of Me.

Broken pieces... I found it wholesome because you broached the subject so well.. You started with a question which set the stage for the reader's eye to look for answers.. (The whole poem is in answer to four vital questions..)Then you dealt with the physical aspect,the mental aspect of self esteem and lastly the tone of resistance. Thirdly and most importantly, your use of language is flawless..the grammar is neat and the punctuation careful. You have not repeated a word although you could have...Brushed, Bruised,Splattered, Bleeding,Ripped, Shattered , Broken.. You've been very careful :)..and it doesn't look contrived at all! :D Kudos!