| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by JJ Johnson on 01/13/12 at 04:10 PM The title caught my eye as I just wrote a piece on death that mentions a ghost. This is pleasently haunting, from the ghost to someone left behind. A kind of goodbye, but as much a hello. Do ghosts die or just fade away? jj |
| Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 01/13/12 at 09:18 PM You can hear the voice fading out a little in that last stanza, and that's a great feeling to be hit with as one reads this. What a pleasure. |
| Posted by Kristine Briese on 01/14/12 at 02:56 AM Sweet and haunting; a lovely piece. |
| Posted by LK Barrett on 01/14/12 at 01:47 PM I really like the setting and the sentiment expressed here...please consider "you" for "your" in the second and third stanzas, "pertains" for "pretains" in the second stanza, "smiling" for "smile" in the last stanza...these small oversights mar an otherwise lovely poem for me...LK |
